Psychomachia
Heather Hubler's Unscrambled Challenge Poppy's Prompts #4 Poppy's Prompts #5
"Fragile. Handle With Care."
You dropped my heart
Cognizant it was made of glass
I watched it descend in slow motion
A careless mishap? A sabotage, mayhap?
You put the blame on the wind
And thrived in that chasmic cosy chaos
~~~~~
I wish I knew then, what I know now
I failed to notice that a neon sign
Above my head blinked "disposable"
It overshadowed my warning label
~~~~~
If I weren't so myopic
If I was just a tad psychic
If I had followed the maps of my gut
If I knew where your trail of paint would lead to
I'd have stopped you long before
~~~~~
You were aphasic in dialect
Nothing more than an empty envelope
Or a cassette with its tape pulled out
You felt so macho, like a champ
But you're a psycho and a chimp
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I'm feeling so conflicted
Should I beg you not to leave?
Or leave it to the cosmic energies?
You don't believe in karma but you will
When it shoves strawberries up your ass
Watching you erode would be my bliss
Author's Notes:
This poem was inspired by and written for:
1. Heather Hubler's Unscrambled Challenge
The word I chose was "Psychomachia" and the words that were unscrambled from it are in Bold.
2. Poppy's Prompts #4
The words to be used were Sabotage, Strawberry, Disposable, Cassette and Glass.
3. Poppy's Prompts #5
The words to be used were Paint, Erode, Envelope, Descend and Wind.
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Comments (72)
This was extremely powerful! Loved it!
congrats on top story.
Congrats on Top Story..
Congrats on the top story, My Morbid Friend. "I failed to notice that a neon sign Above my head blinked "disposable" I am just highlighting the above line because that feeling hurts like nothing else can.
Outstanding 😭
Who you calling psycho and a chimp!? 😅 Ouch! This was creative and fun but also you’ve provided insight into someone’s inner workings. Congrats D! ☺️🥳
Absolutely 🤗 Brilliance at it's Best!!! You go Girlfriend!! Can't wait to read some more!!😘
You’re so talented. I love that you combined three challenges. “Nothing more than an empty envelope Or a cassette with its tape pulled out” I LOVE those lines especially. And that last line was awesome too. You have such an iconic writer’s voice and style and I admire it a lot!
Top Story for your top effort… incorporating 3 challenges!!🤗👏 I looked up the definition of Psychomachia… only to find that you’d provided it at the end! So efficient and talented! The whole package✅
No surprise that this wonderful piece was Top Story and also 1st place for Most Discussed. Your talent never disappoints. The level of creativity and masterfully weaving in multiple prompts is very inspiring!
Damnnnnnn. You crushed this one (well, multiple ones haha!)!!!🤯❤️🥰
This is deep. I must say you killed the prompts. Ingenious. Deserved the Top Story. Congratulations.
This poem resonates deeply with me. The imagery of a fragile heart dropping, the hindsight of missed signs, and the conflict of whether to beg or let cosmic energies intervene—it's all so raw and real. And that final line! Watching you erode would be my bliss—a powerful mix of resignation and vindication. Truly captivating.❤️💫
You absolutely killed these prompts Dharrsheena! Congrats on an amazing TS!
"A careless mishap? A sabotage, mayhap?" This line made me smile in such a heavy poem! I love everything you've ever written, Dharr and this is no different! And that line in the last verse, "Should I beg you not to leave" really hit me hard. Oh crap... it was... deep hit me where I live and all that :) too many times I've asked myself that question, and devastatingly been the subject of it. Oof and ouch lol, wasn't expecting this so early in the week! Congrats on a superbly delivered story Dharr! So happy to see it on the front page where it belongs
Congrats on your TS and impressive work on getting all of those Challenge details mixed in there!
Congrats on Top Story!
Excellent! Congrats on Top Story!
… and congrats on the TS
Masterful execution Dharrsheena and not a word wasted. A true delight to read.
I loved this from the beginning down to the best part...the last. I will hand you the strawberries...don't stop at one! Genius using all those different prompts, too!
"Psychomachia"...what a word! I will definitely be adding that to my collection! This poem was so powerful - you put these words together so masterfully in a way that brought such meaning. "Watching you erode would be my bliss" is a line I'll be thinking about for a long time. 🥹
Wow! A lot of thought went into this in order to cover so many bases. And thanks for introducing me to a new word. Congrats, Dharr!
This is wonderful, Dharrsheena! It’s a great reminder of human complexity. Sometimes we are our own worst enemies. But it’s still reprehensible when others take advantage of our fragility even after we have warned them. Congratulations on top story! Richly deserved! 🥰🥰🥰🥰
I loved it you are a great poet